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Learning English Language is more important than local language why?

#english #language
Language
 is used by human
being
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 to
communication
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.
Language
 plays
crucial
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 role in communication among human beings. Learning
international
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an international
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language
 rather than
native
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a native
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language
 seems to be preferred by individuals as
handful
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 of
people
supports
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this
 opinion
on the other hand
 some believe that every
language
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the connection
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connection
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connections
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.
Firstly
, as I have mentioned earlier
that
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English is
international
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an international
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 speech in
this
 world so if
one
 learns
language
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the language
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, it will provide him or her great benefit as they
we
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will be more confident
while
 communicating with
any
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anyone
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one
, no matter where they are. It leads them towards
the
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potential growth in any situation.
Secondly
, English is
easiest
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language
 and every beginner can learn and use it in time of need. In recent few years, many social media platforms used
English
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language
 to connect with
people
 from different
country
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countries
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 and religions which
create
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creates
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 unity in human
being
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beings
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 as they all speak
one
 speech which is common in every country,
However
, there is
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 of
people
 who believe that
one
 should learn their native tongue first than any
language
 as it makes them authentic.
Due to
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 of
western
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 culture
among
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 the young
generation
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generation,
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 they are forgetting their roots as
language
 is
easiest
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the easiest
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tools
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tool
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 which can remind them who they are as they speak. To recapitulate, I believe that learning
universal
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language
 will be more beneficial to anyone rather than
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a local
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language
 as it will not restrain its user to only certain
group
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groups
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 of
people
 as I have explained in the above paragraphs .
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The essay presents a logical argument for learning English and acknowledges the opposing viewpoint.
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The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and gives a clear opinion.
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The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion.

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