You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic Many university students nowadays live away from their home and their parents because of their university location, while others live with their families. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each situation? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Many college students now live alone without their mother , father ,sisters and brothers because the location of their college
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Secondly
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him self
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, there are many cons of live
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the student
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a small
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he will feel alone . Besides
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language
Your essay contains several grammatical and spelling mistakes that make it difficult to understand at times. Work on improving the clarity and accuracy of your language.
task response
Try to develop your ideas more fully. Provide more specific examples and elaborate on how living away from home impacts different aspects of students' lives.
coherence cohesion
Your essay's structure needs improvement. While you have an introduction and conclusion, ensure that each body paragraph has a clear and distinct main idea. Use transitional phrases to connect ideas more smoothly.
task response
You have addressed both advantages and disadvantages of living away from home, which shows a balanced approach.
coherence cohesion
You included a conclusion that summarizes your main points, which helps to round off the essay.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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