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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates the rates of
people
 in
Finland
 and Sweden
got
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who got
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divorce
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divorced
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 in 5 years from 2011 to 2015.
Overall
,
Swedish
 was the biggest country
that
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with that
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divorce
rate
,
while
Finlanders
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Finland had
 the lowest
rate
 of
people
got
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getting
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divorce
Wrong verb form
divorced
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. In detail, it can be seen,
in
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that in
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 2011 there was around over 40%
Swedish
got
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who got
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divorce
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divorced
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 and
Finland
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in Finland
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 there was below
of
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than
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 40%. In 2012, the percentage of Sweden
people
increase
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increased
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 dramatically
almost
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by almost
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 50% and
this
 was the highest
rate
,
however
 for
Finland
people
experience
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experienced
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decrease
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a decrease
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almost
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of almost
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 30%. Meanwhile, in 2013,
Swedish
 still
the
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had the
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 highest
rate
 but the percentage of
people
got
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who got
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divorce
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divorced
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 faced
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a slightly
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slightly
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slight
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 decrease
around
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of around
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 47%, and
Finland
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Finland's
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people
 slowly
increase
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increased
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almost
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by almost
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 40%.
In
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At
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 the end of
period
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the period
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, the percentage of
Finland
people
 who got
divorce
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divorced
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 exceeded
Swedish
people
around
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by around
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 40% and the number of
people
 in
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the swedish
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swedish
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Swedish
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 got
divorce
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divorced
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 about below 40%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, finland, divorce, swedish, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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