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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter say where you think you left the papers explain why they are so important tell the manager what you want him/her to do

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to inform you that I left some important documents at your hotel after attending a meeting there on 13th July. I guess I left the
papers
 in the conference room on
second
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 floor where the meeting was held. These documents are extremely important for my work. I work for
tourism
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a tourism
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 company which
is
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 had a deal with a lot of companies in foreign countries. These
papers
 are
agreement
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agreements
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 which have to be signed by the investors. Losing them could have serious consequences for both my company and our clients. I kindly request you to check the consequences room or lost and found for these
papers
. If they are found I would appreciate it If you could save them until I am able to retrieve them. If it is more convenient, I would be grateful If you could arrange to have them
send
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 to my address which I will provide once the
papers
 are located. Thank you in advance for your prompt attention to
this
 matter
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 faithfully Akrom
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grammatical accuracy
Make sure to proofread for small grammatical errors. For example, 'consequences room' should be 'conference room'.
coherence cohesion
It would be beneficial to use connectors to better link your ideas. For instance, starting the second paragraph with 'Furthermore' could improve the flow.
task achievement
You effectively addressed all parts of the task, explaining where you left the papers, why they are important, and what you would like the manager to do.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is suitable for the situation; it is polite and professional.
coherence cohesion
You used appropriate paragraphing, which helps in conveying each idea clearly.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dear Sir/Madam,
  • I am writing to inform you that I believe I left some important papers at your hotel.
  • To the best of my recollection, I left the papers in the conference room.
  • These papers are of utmost importance as they contain confidential business information.
  • I kindly request that you or your staff check the conference room and securely send the papers to my address.
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