The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The following table shows information
of
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on
show examples
consumers
in 2002 spending their incomes
to
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on
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different items.
This
data involves
consumers
from Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey.
Overall
,
consumers
in all five
countries
spent comparatively more on food, drinks and tobacco products. Looking through all the data, the most significant
expenditure
was on
this
category. As
it
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apply
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can be seen, in all shown
countries
expenditure
on food, drinks and tobacco are major. In
this
field
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field,
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Ireland’s and Turkey’s
consumers
had the highest expenses from the presented
countries
, 28.91 and 32.14,
accordingly
.
Other
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The other
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three
countries
shared approximately similar numbers, fluctuating between 15 and 19. The second category of items
include
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includes
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clothing and footwear. Italy stood out, because their
consumers
gave 9% of their
expenditure
to
this
field
,
while
Ireland’s, Spain’s, Sweden’s and Turkey’s data showed less than 7% of expenses spent on
this
. As regards the
last
field
, leisure and education
attracts
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attract
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little spending from
consumers
compared to other areas. In all five
countries
, spending in
this
area is the lowest.
This
expenditure
on
this
field
has
the
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a
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minimum
1.98
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of 1.98
show examples
% of Spain’s
consumers
and
the
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a
show examples
maximum
4.35
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of 4.35
show examples
% of Turkey’s
consumers
. Italy’s and Sweden’s
appliance
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appliances
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here
was
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were
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similar, 3.20% and 3.22%,
while
Ireland’s
consumers
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consumer's
consumers'
show examples
expense
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expenses
show examples
on leisure and education showed only 2.21%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumers, countries, expenditure, field with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • food
  • drinks
  • tobacco
  • clothing
  • footwear
  • household goods
  • services
  • leisure
  • education
  • other products
  • comparison
  • highest
  • lowest
  • followed by
  • in all countries
  • various
  • summarise
  • main features
  • relevant
  • information
  • selecting
  • reporting
  • spending
  • table
  • goods
  • data
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