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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The layout of the ground floor has changed from 1958 to 1984 ,
then
 from 1985 to 2000 , and 2001 to the present.
Overall
,
In
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From
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 1958 to 1984 clearly shows
from
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that
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 the layout has been
office
.
However
, has been changed the whole plans to
replaced
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 the
office
to
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with
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apartment
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an apartment
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.
In addition
,
which
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it
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 has now been changed from
apartment
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an apartment
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 to
flower
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a flower
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 shop.
First,
office
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an office
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 has been
build
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built
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 and
have
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has
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include
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included
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 7 rooms.
in addition
, the
manger
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manager
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office
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is the
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the
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a
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 bigger room than all the
others room
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other rooms
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.
second,
the
apartment
include
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includes
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less
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fewer
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 rooms than the old
office
.
In
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On
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 the right of
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the entrance
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entrance
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entrance,
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 there
has
Verb problem
are
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 two
bedroom
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bedrooms
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, and on the left of
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the entrance
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entrance
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entrance,
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 there
has been
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is
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 a huge bathroom and shower.
Third,
from 2001-
the
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to the
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 present has been replaced
the
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by the
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apartment
to
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with
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flower
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a flower
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 shop, and the play area has been now taking the
placed
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place
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 of the bedroom. The only unchanged feature over time is the kitchen.
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task achievement
To achieve a higher score, ensure that you provide a clear and comprehensive explanation of the main features and changes in the layout. Use more precise language and more specific examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your essay by using linking words and phrases to connect different points smoothly. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a specific time period or aspect of the layout changes.
coherence cohesion
Clarify your introduction and conclusion. Your introduction should provide a brief overview of what will be discussed, and your conclusion should summarize the key points made in the essay.
coherence cohesion
Your overall structure is clear, with a logical progression from one time period to the next.
task achievement
You have identified the key changes in the layout over time and described them in your essay.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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