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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart compares the percentage of divorce in
Finland
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 and
Sweden
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 between 2011 to 2015.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the number
of
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in
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Sweden
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 was bigger than that of
Finland
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, except the
last
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 year.
Also
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, an upward trend was observed in the figure for
Finland
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,
while
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 a downward trend was seen in
Sweden
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. In 2011, the proportion of
Sweden
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 was larger than that of
Finland
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, accounting for nearly 44% and 37% respectively. The percentage of
Sweden
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 reached a peak of around 49% in the following year,
whereas
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 that of
Finland
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 accounted for just under 35%, the lowest. Meanwhile, the number
of
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in
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Sweden
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 decreased slightly to approximately 47% in 2013. The figure for
Finland
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 depicted a gentle rise to around 39% during the same period. In 2014, the percentage of both numbers came closer, illustrating 41% for
Finland
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 and nearly 45% for
Sweden
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.
On the contrary
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, in 2015, the proportion of
Finland
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 exceeded that of
Sweden
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 by approximately 5%, representing 41% and 36% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words finland, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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