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In many countries government spend a lot of money on arts. However, some think government should spend more on health and education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Ensure that your essay addresses the prompt directly. Begin with an introduction that outlines your main argument and what your essay will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
Develop each of your main points in separate paragraphs and provide specific examples to support your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
End with a strong conclusion that summarizes your key points and restates your position on the prompt.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocation of funds
  • budget allocation
  • cultural heritage
  • public expenditure
  • quality of life
  • economic growth
  • social inequality
  • public-private partnership
  • fiscal responsibility
  • long-term benefits
  • innovative solutions
  • underprivileged communities
  • life expectancy
  • technological advancements
  • preservation of culture
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