Some people believe today that everyone has a right to access to the Internet and that governments should provide this access for free. Other people believe that access to the internet is not a right and should be paid for like other services.

The statement that, the working week should be shorter and
weekends
should be longer, has been one of the most disputed arguments in the modern era. In
this
essay, I will tackle
this
statement and give my personal opinion if I agree or disagree. On the one hand,
people
agree that the weekend should be longer for multiple reasons. One is, that workers should have
time
to rest
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because some workers work for extended periods of
time
. A good example of
this
is,that I once had a friend who had a job in a catering business, he used to always complain that he wished he had more
time
to rest because his employer used to ask so much from him.
In addition
, longer
weekends
mean the person gets to spend more
time
with their family. The perfect example of
this
is,that I used to not have a job, so every day was a weekend for me, I used to spend some quality
time
and was very comfortable with my family.
On the other hand
,
People
say that extended
weekends
aren't very good for multiple reasons. A good reason is, that longer
weekends
might make an employee lazy. A very good example of
this
is, that if someone stays home for extended periods of
time
, they will be very lazy to complete any simple task, to add more to that, when I was not working and had plenty of
time
at home, I was very lazy and had no motivation to complete anything.
In addition
, longer
weekends
mean less pay, of course working less means you'll be paid less, you can't expect the same salary for doing less work, and some
people
can't afford to get paid less because many
people
including their families depend on their pay. In conclusion, I disagree that the working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend
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because extended
weekends
have more downsides than upsides.
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task achievement
Ensure you address all parts of the prompt. In this case, focus a bit more on presenting both perspectives of the argument before stating your opinion.
task achievement
Improve the clarity of your examples by making sure they directly relate to and support your main points.
coherence cohesion
Organize ideas logically and clearly within paragraphs. Consider using transition phrases to improve the flow between points.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph presents one clear idea, and use topic sentences to guide the reader.
introduction conclusion present
Good introduction and conclusion that clearly frame your argument and opinion.
supported main points
You provide personal examples to support your points, which makes the essay engaging.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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