The first diagram gives information on the quantity of books borrowed from different viilage libraries between June and September in 2014 and the second graph illustrates the proportion of types of book borrowed during this given time.
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first listed line graph depicts information on the number of Correct word choice
The
books
borrowed from different villages
libraries between June and September 2014. The Change the noun form
village
books
were borrowed in
West Eaton, Ryeslip, Sutton Wood and Church Mount libraries. Meanwhile, the second pie chart enumerates the proportion of book genres that were borrowed during that period of time.
A glance at the first chart clearly reveals that the values of Change preposition
from
books
borrowed in West Eaton, Church Mount and Sutton Wood decently
inclined whilst the most appealing style of book to borrow was Fiction.
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To begin
with, borrowed books
from West Eaton and Church Mount exceeded their metrics from a solid 50 in June to a sharp 150 in September, coinciding at the very beginning and end of the listed course. Despite the tremendous depletion of Sutton Wood in August from 250 to 100, it eventually reached 300 at the end
. Regarding remaining values, the books
borrowed in the Ryeslip encountered a modest downturn from 300 to 175.
In stark contrast to the previous drift, the fiction genre placed a colossal room, comprising 43%. Seemingly, the History and Biography genres were borrowed on the same level, recording 14% each. Whereas
the most unappealing book genre was Self-help, consisting of merely 10%, the Science genre was a little viral rather than the Self-help one, constituting of
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