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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in 4 Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in 4 Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040
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illustrates
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of humans
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who
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 are living in 4 different
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Asian
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 countries
espasially
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especially
 in towns from 1970 to 2020 and
prediction
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the prediction
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to
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for
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next
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the next
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 20
years
.
Overall
, we can see that over
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these
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 fifty
years
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a compirison
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compirison
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comparison
 of 4
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countries
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Phillppines
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Phillippines
 was the most populated nation, meanwhile
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the other
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tree
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three
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countres
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countries
 were and
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 the same
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proportions
. All 3 nations were predicted to have
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an upward
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 trend next 20
years
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, in
1970's
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the 1970's
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 the least populated nation was Indonesia(about 12 per cent),wheres
Phillippines
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the Phillippines
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urbans
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urban
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were
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most
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the most
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residented
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residents
 with(31 per cent) which was over the one per cent than
Malasya
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Malaysia
. Over the
years
 the situation has been
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changed
.
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Furthermore
, Malasya and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 were
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almost
 the same
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the 1990's
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1990's
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1990s
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,
then
 Malasya
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doubled
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 the stats for almost twice with
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a prediction
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to
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of
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 2040. The graph
also
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 that no one had
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a downward
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 trend sins 1970
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 who's had a
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little
 decrease
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over
 the period
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 1990 to 2010. In the
end
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end,
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 it is worth mentioning that apparently
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Thailand
to
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apply
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the next 20
years
 will see the
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greatest
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greatest growth
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growth
 than others
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • population density
  • rural-urban migration
  • economic development
  • industrialization
  • infrastructure strain
  • environmental impacts
  • social challenges
  • urban planning
  • government policies
  • housing policies
  • public services
  • trend analysis
  • prediction
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