The diagram below shows how orange juice is produced. Write at least 150 words.
The picture presents the steps for making instant noodles.
Overall
, it takes around 8 steps to go from flour to processed and packaged as instant noodles.
First,
the truck will take the flour from the storage silo to the mixer facility to mix the flour with water and oil until it becomes a dough
. Once dough
Correct article usage
the dough
are
mixed well, it will Change the verb form
is
passed
rollers and become Change the verb form
pass
be passed
dough
sheets and will process until turned into dough
strips. The dough
strips will be processed in such
a way through an automatic machine so that it
Correct pronoun usage
they
changes
shape into Correct subject-verb agreement
change
a
Correct article usage
apply
disc
(noodle discs) so its ready to be packaged.
Before the noodles discs Fix the agreement mistake
discs
is
packed, cooking oil and drying will be added on the top first and everything will be put into the cup. Change the verb form
are
Also
, don’t forget to add vegetables and spices as complement
. Add an article
a complement
Lastly
, we need to seal the cup and give a label for marketing purposes.Submitted by rasyidrahma13 on
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