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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2), emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal Between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2), emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal Between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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The graph displays
average
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an average
the average
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 number of carbon dioxide emissions which are shown as
a metric
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a metric tone
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tones
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tonnes
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 per person in
the
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apply
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Sweden, Italy,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and Portugal
around
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for
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decades
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the decades
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 from 1967 to 2007.
Number
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The number
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 of Carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom and Sweden
have
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has
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 steadily fallen in 4
decades
 and in the
end
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end,
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 Sweden’s
statistic
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statistics
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was
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were
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 as same as Portugal’s .Those falling trends are totally reversed compared to Italy and Portugal as
the
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a
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 result Italy’s
numbers
 increased to the UK’s in 2007. From 1967 to 1997 there are gradually increasing trend of
numbers
 in Portugal and Italy. But from 1997 to 2007 there
are
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were
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 no improvements and both country reached their plateaus in
numbers
 which were approximately 7 for Italy and 3 for Portugal. United Kingdom’s results were marginally decreasing all over 4
decades
.
Which we
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We
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 cannot say about Sweden, they showed
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a significantly
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significantly increasing
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significant increase
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 in
numbers
 between 1967 and 1977 decade which was their peak and started their downfall in
numbers
 for the
last
 3
decades
 between 1977 to 2007.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words decades, numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per capita emissions
  • fluctuate
  • decline
  • rise
  • trend
  • peak
  • notable
  • dramatic increase
  • steady decrease
  • comparatively
  • significant
  • marginal
  • consistently
  • plateau
  • surge
  • diminish
  • aggregate data
  • historical data
  • metric tons
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