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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table and chart
provides
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 key information about the
number
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 of
students
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 in Australian
university
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universities
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 during nine years from 2001 to 2010. The table clearly
show
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shows
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 the
number
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 of international research
students
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 in 2010 was more than in 2001. During the period, the local research
students
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in
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both male and female
was
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had
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 the
highst
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highest
number
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 in the university. In 2001, the international research
students
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around
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were around
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 13%.
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Further more
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Furthermore
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 the
number
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 of
the
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apply
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male was double
than
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apply
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the
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female
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of female
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.
Howevre
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However
, in 2010 the international
students
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 increased and became 27%.
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, from 2001 to 2010 the local
students
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 decreased in both
gender
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genders
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. In
male
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males
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, change is nearly 10%.
In the
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 same
statution
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situation
station
 happen
in
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to
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the
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apply
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female
students
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.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of
students
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 studying in Australian universities in the 9 years became higher, special in the international
students
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.
Furthermore
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, the male in all years
in
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apply
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the local or international
student
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students
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 more than
femal
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female
females
.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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