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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides information about the
number
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 of
research
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students
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 in
Australian
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universities
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 in 2001 and 2010.
Overall
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, in 2010 the total range clearly shows
highest
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the highest
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 than the total
number
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 in 2001.
According
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 the data, international
research
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students
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hitting
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 the lowest point in 2001. In 2001, local
research
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student
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students
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number
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numbered
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 around 33,657 which is more than the international
research
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students
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.
In addition
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, only around 5000
of
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apply
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international
research
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student
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students
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study
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studied
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 in
Australian
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universities
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 in 2001.
However
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, in 2010 the table shows
increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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 the
number
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 of
students
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 from both local and international
students
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.
Furthermore
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,
in
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from
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 2001 to 2010, the
local
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number of local
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students
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 upward from 33,657 to 39,488.
Also
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, the
number
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 of international
students
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 suddenly
raised
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increased
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 to
became
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apply
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14,593 which is
highest
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the highest
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number
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 for both years in
Australian
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universities
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. The data in the table
,
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apply
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 shows in 2010
the
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apply
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Australian
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universities
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has been
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were
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 noticed more than in 2001.
However
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, the local
students
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 take a bigger
number
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 in
Australian
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universities
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 than the international
research
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students
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, research, students, australian, universities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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