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Band 7

A friend you met last year has invited you to visit him/her in his/her country. You have never been there before and need some information before you leave. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • request some advice about a gift for his/her family • ask about activities and clothing in his/her country • find out about the food

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to a friend to inquire information about his
country
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. I met my friend 1 year ago and now I am going to his
country
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.
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, I need to know information about the
country
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.I will ask you one more thing. List the things that your parents like. I want to buy them a present. They may not like the gift I gave them, tell me. I am very interested in your
country
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. If possible, give information about your
country
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. Let's say
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, what are your clothes like? .
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, what traditions and activities do you have?Our traditions are very sincere. Not only young people
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 but
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 adults actively participate in all our events. As for the national dress of Uzbekistan, the name of
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 dress is satin. The national dish in our
country
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 is pilaf. If you eat
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 food, the taste will not leave your mouth. I would
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 like to know about your national dishes. Yours sincerely, Qobiljonova Kamola

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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down your letter into more distinct paragraphs to help organize your ideas more clearly.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your letter flows smoothly from one point to the next. Using transitional phrases can enhance the logical flow.
task achievement
Focus on using a more friendly and personal tone, as the letter is addressed to a friend. This will make your writing more suitable for the context.
task achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task: asking for advice about a gift, inquiring about activities and clothing, and asking about the food.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of your letter are appropriate and polite.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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