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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided intot three categories , from 1995-2002 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided intot three categories , from 1995-2002 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph illustrates the quantity and differences of
minutes
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 in three types of calls which are the local-fixed
line
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, national and international-fixed
line
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 and mobiles in the UK starting from 1995 until 2002.
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, despite the fluctuation in the
numbers
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, the local-fixed
line
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 seems to be used more than the other methods, mobiles are the least used method leaving the national and international-fixed
line
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 in the middle. First and foremost, the majority of the population between 1995 and 2002 depended on local fixed
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line
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cases as nearly 72
billion
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minutes
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 were consumed in 1995.
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, the
numbers
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 of the local-fixed
line
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 increased in 1998 and 1999 reaching 90
billion
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minutes
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, but after that, the
numbers
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 dropped to 72
billion
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minutes
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 again in 2002.
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, the national and international-fixed
line
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 showed a gradual elevation in the
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 since 1995 as it was approximately 38
billion
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minutes
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 of calling ending to 60
billion
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minutes
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 in 2002. In the end, as mobiles started to be known the number of mobile
minutes
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 showed a dramatic increase as it was 3
billion
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 in 1995 and reached 45
billion
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 in 2002.
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