The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes

young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
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Two graphs illustrate the relationship between location (Private studios, Community
halls
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and other, School
halls
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, and College-based studios) and types of dance classes (
Ballet
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, Tap, and Modern), compared by
age
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group of children in Australian towns.
Overall
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, most young people like to participate in the
class
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at a private studio.
Moreover
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, the kind of dance classes that girls and boys choose for studying have different types at different ages.
Ballet
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is the most popular for children under 11
while
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the 11 to 16
age
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group likes Modern the most. The biggest part of the pie chart shows the percentage of individual dance schools at 48%,
while
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the college-based studios are the smallest percentage at 10%.
Additionally
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, Community
halls
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and unspecified categories and School
halls
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have similar percentages at 18 per cent and 24 per cent by order. In the under 11
age
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group graphs, the
ballet
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class
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has the greatest number of students at 600,
while
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the Modern
class
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has the lowest point at 300 people.
In contrast
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, the modern
class
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has approximately 500 students which is the highest number of 11 to 16
age
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groups,
while
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the
Ballet
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is at the lowest point at 300 people.
Moreover
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, the tap
class
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has almost the same rate in both
age
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groups.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words halls, ballet, age, class with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • attendance
  • community centers
  • dance schools
  • private studios
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • ballroom
  • analysis
  • popularity
  • accessibility
  • cost
  • cultural trends
  • media influences
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