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The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000, 2020, and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000, 2020, and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar chart gives information on Southland’s main exportations in 3 different categories: international tourism, milk and
meat
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products
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 in 2000,2015 and future projections for 2025. Units are measured in billions
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pounds
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. At
the
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first glance, it is clear, that international tourism and dairy
products
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 provide
with
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major revenue
while
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meat
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 nourishments have the lowest.
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, in 2000 the most profitable business
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2000 was worldwide tourism, with approximately 8
billion
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of
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pounds
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.
This
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 figure skyrocketed after 5 years to 8
billion
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pounds
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. It is predicted that multinational travel will move upward to 10
billion
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pounds
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.
Conversely
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,
meat
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products
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 in 2000 comprised the lowest revenue for Southland with nearly 5.5
billion
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pounds
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, and after 5 years hit rock bottom with approximately 5.2
billion
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pounds
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. By 2025,it is expected that the revenue from
meat
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products
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 will touch the bottom point with 5
billion
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pounds
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. The abroad sales for dairy
products
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 fluctuated over the period given. In 2000 it comprised a little less than 7.5
billion
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pounds
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.
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, it doubled noticeably in 2015. Despite
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 growth, it has been predicted to slightly drop after 10 years.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meat, products, pounds, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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