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The diagrams below show the development of the horse over a period of 40 million years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the development of the horse over a period of 40 million years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagrams illustrate the transformation of the horse
since
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40
milion
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million
 years time.
Initially
,
this
 species
called
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 eohippus during the period of 40 million years. They had a smaller feature and
toes
instead
 of hooves which inclusive of 5
toes
 in each leg.
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 on to the 30 million time frame,
scientist
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scientists
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 named
this
 animal mesohippus. They began to change drastically double the size than previous, surplus the
toes
become
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 more hoof-like but
are
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were
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 still distinct with only 3
toes
.
After
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15
millions
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 years later,
a
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further
devolpment
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development
seen
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 in
such
kind
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 of habitant where their body
grown
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 even larger.
Not to mention
, merychippus's
toes
 almost entirely transformed into hooves
as well
as
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 the length of the legs
are
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 much longer.
Finally
, in
this
 era, the modern horse is four times bigger than
initial
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 size.
In addition
, they
also
 fully developed their hooves, and
the
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 legs
grown
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grew
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 much stronger to adapt
for
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to
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 running and endurance.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words toes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolution
  • prehistoric
  • size progression
  • hoof development
  • toes transformation
  • limb elongation
  • species adaptation
  • significant change
  • comparative size
  • distinct differences
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