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The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts below illustrate protein, carbohydrates and fat had
proportion
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 in three different diets.
Overall
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, it can be seen that carbohydrates had the highest
proportion
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, followed by protein,
while
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 the lowest had fat. On the one hand, looking at the pie charts in detail, the biggest carbohydrates which was the healthy
diet
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 for sports at 60 per
cent
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, followed by a healthy
diet
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 at 50 per
cent
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. The
last
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 one was the average
diet
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 at 40 per
cent
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.
Moreover
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, Protein was the second
proportion
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 which started with the average
diet
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 at 40 per
cent
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.
Next,
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a healthy
diet
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 was the same at 30 per
cent
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.
Finally
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, a healthy
diet
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 for sport was at 25 per
cent
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.
On the other hand
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, Regarding the lowest data. the fat had the lowest data, it started at 25 per
cent
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 the healthy
diet
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.
On the other hand
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, the average
diet
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 and healthy
diet
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 stayed the same at 20 per
cent
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 of
proportion
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, diet, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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