The two pie charts show how different industries used electricity in 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The given two pie charts compare the

comsuption

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consumption

of electricity in five types of energy resources in 1995 and 2005. Units are given in percentages.

Overall

fussil

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fossil

fuels

such

as gas, coal and petrol are still in the categories of

top

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the top

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three as the most used materials to produce electricity from 1995 and 2005,

whereas

other power

resource

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resources

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remained the least

favored

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favoured

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during that time. Regarding

fussil

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fossil

fuels in 1995 and 2005, coal

has

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had

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a higher demand compared to

other

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the other

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two resources, with 29.80% increased to 30.93% .

Following

this

, gas fell a close second

shown

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showing

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slightly

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increase from 29.63% to 30.31%.

In contrast

, petroleum has reversed

trend

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the trend

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but

still

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is still

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under the group of top three out of five resources, with 29.27% and 19.55% respectively. Looking at

the

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apply

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nuclear and other energy, both in total, accounted for no more than 20% in each mentioned

years

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year

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However

, over the ten years,

although

both of them are the least choice of power production. There

have

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has

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a positive trend with a rise approximately of four to five

pencents

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per cent

percents

each.

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