There have been major advances in technology over recent decades and this has led to significant improvements in people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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last
few decades,
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major progress in
technology
have
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been seen which has made
living
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the living
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style
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lifestyle
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of
the
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people
a lot easier. Within the
last
20
years
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the world has been fully changed. As survival of human beings has been a lot easier. Nowadays, technological things like
smart phones
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, laptops, and
also
Ai
has
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been developed so that the source of information can be carried without any problem.
Advance
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technology
like electric cars and
autodriving
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auto driving
auto-driving
facilitie
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facilities
facility
car
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cars
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are being developed and many other technological devices are being developed.
For example
automatic vaccum
which
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pick's
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picks
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up dust as
with
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the
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it senses dust,
also
with the
help
of
Ai
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AI
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many
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knowledge can be obtained
also
many files or
as
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programs can be created with the
help
of
ai
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AI
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within
short
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a short
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period of time.
Also
with the
help
of
technology
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technology,
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many health problems or the surgery can be done with the
help
of machines. and
the
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scientists can
also
experiment
on
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very new things.
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, As
the
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major
advancement
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advancements
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in
technology
is
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happening the world might face
a big problems
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big problems
a big problem
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like
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if
people's
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people
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start to fully
relay
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rely
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on
technology
and
forgot
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about how to do things
then
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and the
technology's
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technologies
technology
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suddenly starts to stop working
then
the world might
face
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a big problem. A war might
also
break
as
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with the use of
advance
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advanced
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technology
.
Also
,there have been seen that the IQ of today's generation as compared to old generations,as
todays
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generation
morely
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merely
relies
on
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more on
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technology
.  In conclusion,
the
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major
advancement
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advancements
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in
technology
can bring huge development or can even bring
distruction
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destruction
with its use. As it is the aspect of
people
as how the
people
use
the
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technology
.
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task achievement
Your essay does address the topic, but make sure you avoid grammatical errors. For instance, instead of 'A major progress,' it should be 'major progress.'
coherence cohesion
Introduce your main points clearly in the introduction to improve coherence. For example, specify that you will discuss both the positive aspects and potential drawbacks of technological advancements.
task achievement
Add more specific examples to support your points and make your arguments more compelling. For instance, specific examples of how technology has improved healthcare would strengthen your essay.
coherence cohesion
Make sure your ideas flow logically from one to another. Using linking phrases like 'Furthermore,' 'In addition,' 'On the other hand,' and 'For example,' would greatly improve the cohesion of your essay.
task achievement
Your essay covers both sides of the argument, addressing both the benefits and potential downsides of technological advancements.
coherence cohesion
You conclude by summarizing your main points effectively, leaving the reader with a clear idea of your stance on the issue.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cutting-edge
  • innovations
  • breakthroughs
  • automation
  • AI (Artificial Intelligence)
  • mobile technologies
  • diagnostic tools
  • renewable energy
  • efficiency
  • economic growth
  • knowledge sharing
  • global scale
  • cleaner alternatives
  • job displacement
  • update skills
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