The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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of stores that started and shut down in a nation from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, in the beginning, the highest
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of
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opened and closed
while
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at the end
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of the period it reduced.
Firstly
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, 8500
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opened in 2011, which is the highest
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in
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graph.
After
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this
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, it quickly decreased within a year. The
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of stores dramatically increased until 2014 and it almost met the closures
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count with approximately 6500.
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, in the middle of the years between 2015 and 2016 the
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of new
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stabilized, next to
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there was a dramatic increase happened in 2017 with around 4200. In comparison with 2011, the
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of
shops
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decreased to half of the amount in the year 2018.
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, in 2011 there were around 6500
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closed and
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continuously decreased until 2012. One notable change was that the highest
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of
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closed in 2013.
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, the lowest
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of
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closed in the year 2015.
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, in 2016 there were
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closed amount rapidly increased to around 5000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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