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The chart below give the number of people employed in five types of work in a certain region in Australia in 2001 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below give the number of people employed in five types of work in a certain region in Australia in 2001 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of folks employed in five different works in a certain region of Australia in the
years
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 2001 and 2008. At first glance, the data shows Sales was more popular than other jobs which are mentioned before. It was around 160000 people who worked in
this
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 job and it is shown there was an increase between 2001 and 2008. Humans who worked in Accounting and Computing and Nursing were approximately 60000 in 2008.
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, Computing and Nursing had more than 50000 guys in 2001. There was a little fall and a growth respectively for Accounting and Nursing which were approximately less than 10000 people during these two periods .
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, Computing had raised too but it was more than others. It was around 10000 people increase in seven
years
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. The chart shows the lowest bar which is Farming around 20000 in both
years
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. It had a small decrease during these
years
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment trends
  • workforce
  • sector
  • industry
  • agriculture
  • services
  • economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • policy changes
  • notable increases/decreases
  • statistical data
  • regional employment patterns
  • comparative analysis
  • percentage points
  • employment rate
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