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The best way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organisation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 that working with colleagues from other nationalities helps you understand different cultures.
This
 option is important to consider if you are looking to explore different traditions and nationalities. I agree with
this
 position and fully support it. In my essay, I want to give my arguments and explain why
this
 is the best way to broaden your horizons.
Firstly
, some people believe that you can expand your horizons only by
traveling
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 to other countries. But
this
 is only a part of what can be seen.
For example
, when you come to the capital of another state, you imagine that the all country lives like
this
.
However
,
this
 is not the case because all cities are different and have different types of people.
Secondly
, only from colleagues can you learn all the details of their real life in the country of birth,
such
 as social life, traditions, cuisine and spoken language.
To sum up
, I can say that you will never know the real culture of other countries if you do not come into contact with their inhabitants, but you will get more information only if you have friends or colleagues of different nationalities.
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Consider elaborating more on your main points. Provide specific examples or anecdotes to strengthen your argument about how working in a multinational organization aids cultural understanding.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each of your paragraphs develops a single clear idea. Try using topic sentences for each paragraph to enhance coherence.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which effectively communicate the main argument.

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