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What are some specific examples of how technology has simplified daily tasks and improved efficiency in everyday life?"

#technology #tasks #efficiency #life
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technologies and the technologies contribute
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 critical role and have created
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 bigger impact on humans.
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, there are many technologies which make my life easier,
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Machineary
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Machinery
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human work and
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 the result with just
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communication
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 become very easy, people use social media for communication
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.The most important is transportation. But
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flying cars become common
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 any traffic.
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 I think Virtual screens
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people
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don't
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task achievement
To achieve a higher score, aim to provide a more complete response by elaborating on each point made. For instance, expand on how specific technologies improve daily tasks and efficiency.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by ensuring each paragraph has a clear central idea. Consider starting with an introduction that outlines the main points you will discuss, and conclude with a summary.
task achievement
Include more specific examples and elaborate on them. Instead of broadly mentioning machinery, social media, and transportation, explain how specific technologies in these categories simplify daily tasks.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that there are clear transitions between paragraphs and ideas. This will help enhance the overall flow of the essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay has multiple points indicating a good start on task achievement and the inclusion of relevant examples.
task achievement
You have identified key areas where technology impacts daily life, such as machinery, communication, and transportation.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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