In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?
With Technological advancement, it is evident that physical money will be replaced with digital
payment
. However
, elderly people would not be satisfied to use
these new means of Change preposition
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payment
as they are unfamiliar with technology and they have conservative personality
.
First of all, credit cards and bank applications are so convenient , safe and environmentally friendly . Fix the agreement mistake
personalities
In other words
, there is a risk of robbery and theft in cash purchasing, however
individuals easily can block their accounts in case of any unforeseen dangers in their digital payments. Add a comma
however,
For example
, my mother’s wallet was stolen several times in the subway. Moreover
, all credit cards have passwords which guarantee their immunity, so nobody can misuse them ,
if they are stolen or lost. Needless to mention, printing notes has Remove the comma
apply
negative
impact on the ecosystem because trees and water should be used to produce paper.
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a negative
Although
technology can facilitate human lives, old
generation may not adapt themselves properly Fix the agreement mistake
the older
with
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to
this
innovation. For instance
, my grandfather is not able to use smart phones
, let alone bank applications. Correct your spelling
smartphones
Furthermore
, they have misconception
that online Add an article
the misconception
a misconception
payment
is not safe and secure due to
risk
of cyber-attacks. The risk could Correct article usage
the risk
be mitigate
by some conservative actions including setting powerful passwords.
In a nutshell, Change the verb form
be mitigated
due to
upgrading technology, cash payment
will be obsolete in the near future and the new innovative methods will play the
significant role in the management of financial Correct article usage
a
transaction
. It is very important to educate people especially senior ones to use these new methods safely.Fix the agreement mistake
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