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The pie charts show the revenue sources and expenditure of a children’s charity in the USA in one year.

The pie charts show the revenue sources and expenditure of a children’s charity in the USA in one year.
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The pie chart illustrates the income sources and expenditure of a children’s charity in the UA over 12 months and considerate for donating food, community, program and government, fundraising, management and general.
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, it is readily noticeable that the highest
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 sources were donated food.
In contrast
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, spending was increased on program services.
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, the lowest profit resources were the government and investment where expenditure was less in fundraising and management.
According to
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 the chart, donated food reported as the dominant
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 accounted for 86%
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 the expenditure was nearly 96%.
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, community contribution came in second place in
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 by tenth
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 the charity spent on fundraising had a sum of 2.6%. Program
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 demonstrated percentages of 2.2% in third place and spending in management and general were roughly 1.6%. The remaining income resources were investment income and government grants added to others which represented less than 0.5% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words revenue with synonyms.
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