Some people think that there will be an increased dependence on intelligent robots in the future. Others think that robots will have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

On a large scale , the progress of
robots
and
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artificial
inteligence
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intelligence
was astonishing in the past century . At first sight , maybe it would be horrifying to think about the progressive role that
robots
are playing in our
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,
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because
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movies we have seen in past years ,
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. But I think
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of robotic technologies is not a bad thing . In my
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view,
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robots
are more precise and faster than humans
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are important factors in everything . They can take the responsibility of so many jobs that people can not do at all or can do them in a more effective way at least . Using
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robots
can lead to less traffic and less air pollution too .
In addition
to what has already been mentioned ,
robots
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tired , As humans
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. They can have unlimited energy and do not need to rest . The cost
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doing jobs with
robots
can be lower too .
On the other hand
, some may say that If we hand over everything to machines it may cause
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of a lot of occupations and make many individuals unemployed , which is not a
currect
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correct
current
idea as I see it . At
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machines can not do
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literally
everything . As another negative effect , we can mention that leaving everything to mechanical beings may result in humans
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lazy and less interested in working which can create mental crises in persons .
Overall
, I believe dependence on intelligent
robots
is a beneficial and useful happening and at least for now , I
dont
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don't
feel bad about it and I like to hear more about their advance in future .
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The essay presents a balanced view by discussing both the potential benefits and drawbacks of increased dependence on intelligent robots.
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The conclusion clearly states your opinion, summarizing the main points effectively.
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The essay covers a range of ideas and arguments, demonstrating a good level of critical thinking.

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