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The maps below show the changes that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860, and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860, and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The three maps illustrate the differences in Willington
town
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 between the years 1780, 1860, and 2000. The
town
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 showed
a
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significant development throughout the centuries.
Although
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 the difference between the maps is clear, in 1780 the
town
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 was not much deteriorated. Villages were getting more and more over
years
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. As shown,
population
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the population
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 surely has increased.
As a result
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, homes showed a jump throughout the years. 100 homes were
additionally
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 constructed in 1860,
while
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 300 more homes were built in 2000. In 1860, one farm
got
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 replaced with a road allowing people to reach the side of the
river
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.
In addition
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, a bridge was added in the
center
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centre
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 of the
river
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 to allow people
reach
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 the other hand side of the
river
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.
Moreover
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, in 1860, the
woods'
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 space
was
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decreased without a clear reason. In 2000, the map presents a modern form of the
town
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. Shops were introduced
at
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on
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 the
left hand
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left-hand
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 side of the
river
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. Because learning has become an essential thing, two schools were built near to three sports fields. For sure, a road was constructed
started
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 from the houses ended by the schools, allowing students to get their education. A wetland for the birds was found at the very end of the
river
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 too. The
town
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have
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has
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 been
modernalised
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modernised
modernized
 wisely to be a complete-service
town
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban development
  • rural
  • undeveloped
  • substantially
  • railway line
  • market area
  • extensive urbanization
  • population growth
  • industrial areas
  • shopping centers
  • network of roads
  • public facilities
  • comparison
  • transformation
  • evolution
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