Your friend has asked you to help find a music teacher for their child. Write to your friend describing the teacher you have found. Explain why they are suitable Explain their background Explaing how they can get in touch

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Dear Aman, I’m writing

this

letter regarding the

music

teacher

who asked for your daughter. The

teacher

is Mr Jagjit Singh, forty years old and very professional in teaching discipline. I found him on the Internet because he is teaching on an online platform—his channel named

Music

Kids on YouTube. He provides online and offline classes, which would be prudent for your kids.

Apart from

this

, his course material includes all musical instruments for rent, making the course cost-effective and flexible.

On the other hand

, Mr Singh has seven years of experience in

music

. He was a

music

teacher

at Gandhi School for seven years in Dehli.

Moreover

, he belongs to our city. If you want more information about classes, fees and schedules, call him on 889878.

otherwise

, you can visit his online portal for

further

assistance I hope you would like him as a

teacher

. See You soon! Parm

Submitted by parminderbitti3 on Sat Aug 10 2024

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logical structure

The logical flow of information from introduction, suitability, background, and contact details is well organized.

single idea per paragraph

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

6.5

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

7.5

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

7.5

Complete response

7.5

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

150 words

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