Today,people are using the things and rhrowing or replacing it with latest models or latest fashion . Do the disadvantages pf throwaway society outweigh any possible economic advantage ?

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strategy of the biggest companies throughout the world .
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brands .
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that will clearly has been affect the economy because when
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individuals
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more and the companies
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companies will pay bigger taxes
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influence
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richer or more beautiful than previously so large brands take
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their products ,
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when replaced by the newest one like the
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medical machines like x_ ray and dentist machines it really deserve to
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it or develop it ,
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for important stuff not just for fun on the whole ,
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effected
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by the media and society to buy new
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wisely before
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