Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic problem. 1.Do you agree or disagree. 2. What other measures do you think might be affected.

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vehicle
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is the main reason behind the traffic congestion. Many people
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that
this
issue could be controlled
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rising
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raising
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the rate of fuel.
On the other hand
, some people
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that it can impact on
overall
market and
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should
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initated
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for a change.
In
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my perspective. I
also
believe that increasing the rate of petrol is not
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effective solution for the cause as it can
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the economy negatively.
Firstly
, Increasing the fuel rate can affect the prices of goods and
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commodities
which
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results
in
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inflammation
inflation
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Due to
higher petrol rates
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the portion
of edible and other supplies will
also
increase
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their
prices. Ninety
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of supplies rely on transportation.
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on
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country-side
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or in an area where public
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transportation
is
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inaccessible
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situation as it may affect
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thier
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their
budget and unable to afford the expense.
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task achievement
To improve task achievement, clearly state your stance on the issue and make sure you answer both parts of the question fully. While you have provided a perspective on not increasing petrol prices, suggest alternative measures in a detailed manner.
coherence cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and is connected logically to the others. Make better use of linking words and phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
The essay addresses the given prompt and provides a clear opinion on the issue.
coherence cohesion
The essay identifies relevant and important points regarding the economic consequences of increasing fuel prices.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion
  • traffic jams
  • public transport
  • alternative means of transportation
  • cycling
  • carpooling
  • economic impact
  • financial strain
  • commute
  • inadequate public transportation
  • carpooling lanes
  • bike lanes
  • dedicated public transport routes
  • public transport infrastructure
  • investing
  • congestion charges
  • peak times
  • navigable
  • flexible working hours
  • remote working
  • rush hours
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