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The chart illustrates distances traveled per person per week (in kilometers) in terms of 5 types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.

The chart illustrates distances traveled per person per week (in kilometers) in terms of 5 types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.
The provided bar chart serves as an insightful illustration of the
distance
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 covered by an individual on
weekly
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a weekly
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 basis in different types of transportation (bicycle, motorbike,
air
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, bus and rail) during 1990 and 2000. The units are measured in
Kilometers
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. The
overall
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 impression of the chart is that there has been a slight increase in the
distance
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 travelled by
britishers
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Britishers
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 via rail, bus and
air
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.
While
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 a significant decrease can be observed in the commuters, commuting by bicycles and motorbikes in 2000.
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 with, approximately 5
Kilometers
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 of
distance
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 was covered via bicycle each week in 1990 which has now fallen down to 2
Kilometers
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 in 2000.
Same
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 pattern can be observed in the people using motorbikes, earlier around 7
Kilometers
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was
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the mean weekly travel which has now dropped to 5
Kilometer
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Kilometers
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. On
other
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the other
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 hand, people using
bus
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buses
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 as a medium of travel has increased in one decade, from 40
Kilometers
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 to 43
Kilometers
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.
Furthermore
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,
similar
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a similar
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 increase in the
distance
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 was noted in the travellers taking trains.
However
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, a massive resurgence was noted in
air
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 travellers. In 1990, almost none used
airplane
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airplanes
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 to travel but by 2000, around 5
Kilometers
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 were travelled by an individual per week via
air
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words distance, air, kilometers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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