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The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts present the answers to a survey of
people
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 from different age categories about what makes them most delighted.
Overall
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, the most significant reason
people
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 under and over thirty choose is their achievements at work.
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 it appears that both age categories have two factors in common,
people
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 under 30 years have more unknown things that make them happier. In terms of the most crucial reasons,
people
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 who are in their twenties are more satisfied if they achieve more in work at 31%, but when they start their thirties,
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 rate increases by 1%. Doing the hobbies they love makes youth less happy than adults by 2
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.
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,
people
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 over thirty consider their financial security a huge factor with a fifth of the total, below 30 finding their appearance more important with almost the same portion of the over ones. Surprisingly, the proportion's difference between the second-highest and the third-highest is constant at 4
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, even when one of the reasons is different. Turning to the two remainders, more than a tenth of the total is being with family for maturers, and
traveling
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 at 15% for youngsters.
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,
people
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 under 30 and
people
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 over 30 have other reasons to be pleasant with 14% and 10% respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • age groups
  • responses
  • happiness factors
  • participants
  • contribute
  • compare
  • patterns
  • differences
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