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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
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The line chart displays the
changes
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 by month in the
prices
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 of
cooper
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copper
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, nickel and zinc in the year 2014.
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, nickel started the
period
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 with the highest
percentage
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, decreasing dramatically during the months. Zink had the lowest
percentage
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 at the beginning of the year
,
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 after
a
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steadily decreased and stable
changes
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 finished the
period
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 with the highest
percentage
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. Cooper was the metal with
most
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the most
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 stable
prices
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 throughout the
period
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. The
changes
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on
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in
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prices
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the prices
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 of Nickel started
in
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at
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 6% and dropped abruptly reaching -3% in June, after
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slowly
increased
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it
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and kept remained for 3 months until
reach
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reached
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 just over 1%
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 of the
period
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. Cooper started with the second highest
percentage
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 with 2 %,
however
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, the
changes
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 in
prices
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 hovered between 2% and zero during the months. Zinc started with the lowest
percentage
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 around 1% after a small
increased
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it
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the
percentage
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 dramatically went down until June with just over -1%,
then
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 it kept stable until October when started to
went
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 up, reaching
the
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its
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 highest
percentage
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2
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of 2
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%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, prices, period, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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