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The chart below shows the average hours spent per day in leisure and sports activities by youngest and oldest populations in the US in 2015.

The chart below shows the average hours spent per day in leisure and sports activities by youngest and oldest populations in the US in 2015.
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The bar chart illustrates the median daily
hours
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 spent on leisure
time
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 and physical activities by teenagers and elderly
people
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 in the US in 2015.
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, it can be seen that watching television is the most popular entertainment among both age groups, despite the fact that the oldest generation is almost double on a daily basis
To begin
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 with, there are three different categories that the eldest one is more desired. They watch TV Shows about twice the youngster at 4.5
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 and 2.4
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, respectively.
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, the mean
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 spent by older
people
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 on reading are 5 times more than younger with roughly 1 hour and 0.2
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.
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, elderly ones spent more
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 relaxing and improving their critical thinking at 0.6
hours
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 per day.
On the other hand
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, younger
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 are more likely to play sports or exercise activities than older ones with 0.6
hours
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 and 0.2
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 apart, and
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 play games or computer in their leisure
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 for 1.2
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,
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people
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 ages over 75 just 0.5
hours
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.
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, both ageing groups tend to use their free
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 to improve their social interaction nearly the same at approximately 0.8
hours
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 in a day.
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