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The diagram below shows. How a biofuel called ethanol is produced

The diagram below shows. How a biofuel called ethanol is produced
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The given process illustrates how
ethanol
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, a type of biofuel, is produced.
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, there are ten main stages in the production of
ethanol
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, starting with the absorption of sunlight and
carbon
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dioxide
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 by trees and ending with the release of
carbon
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dioxide
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 by vehicles using
the
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ethanol
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.
To begin
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 with, trees absorb sunlight and
carbon
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dioxide
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 to grow. After harvesting, these trees are processed into cellulose by machinery. The cellulose is
then
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 converted into sugar in the fifth stage.
This
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 sugar is essential for the next steps in the process. In the following stages, microbes are added to the sugar to ferment it into
ethanol
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. The resulting
ethanol
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 is used as fuel in vehicles
such
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 as cars, trucks, and
airplanes
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.
This
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 use of
ethanol
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 leads to the emission of
carbon
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dioxide
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, which is released back into the atmosphere, completing the cycle.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol, carbon, dioxide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biomass
  • ethanol
  • fermentation
  • microorganisms
  • yeast
  • carbon dioxide
  • distillation
  • purification
  • dehydration
  • raw materials
  • storage
  • distribution
  • renewable energy
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable fuel
  • concentration
  • impurities
  • alcohol content
  • crop growth
  • conversion process
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