Most artist earn low salaries and should therefore recieved fundings from government in order for them to continue thier work. to what extent do you agree?

Majority

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artists

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of artists

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obtain low basic income compared to other occupations,

hence

the

government

should contribute concerning artists’

long term

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work. From my

perspective

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perspective,

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this

idea is profoundly true in terms of its social responsibility and productivity. Transitioning into

first

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reason, giving

support

to the

citizen

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is one of the

government’

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purpose

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purposes

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, which is

increase

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well

being

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well-being

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the

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citizen

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citizens

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it self

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themselves

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,

this

rule should

be apply

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one zero tolerance, which

mean

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government

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the government

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must

looking

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look

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after the

citizen

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citizens

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it self

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themselves

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in terms of

the

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the the

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well being,

for

instance

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government

can provide a plethora of supports,

this

could be money, promotion, training and others,

however

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however,

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this

kind of

support

can

determined

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by the industry and the urgent. In

this

case

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case,

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artists could be named as entertainers

that

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who

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need

much

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apply

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money to

support

their career since the equipment and material course could be included as expensive goods.

Secondly

, the

develop

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developing

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country could be determined in terms of the number of

employee

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employees

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, if the

number of

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unemployment rate high compared to

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the employee

an employee

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employee

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employees

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,

this

could be mean that the rate

productivity

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of productivity

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is low,

thus

government

should take action to invest their money

to

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in

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inappropriate salary job in their country,

such

as

artist

since if the

government

give full

support

to

artist

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the artist

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, the

the

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point of view public will change and people will not overlook

artist

anymore,

moreover

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they will give positive feedback to itself,

moreover

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it will lead to the enthusiast of buying their creation. In conclusion, if the

government

wants the

artist

industry to grow gradually, they would have to

give

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a positive contribution relating to funds. I wholeheartedly suggest that

government

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the government

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also

has accountability to

monitoring

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the fund itself,

hence

financial mismanagement will not happen.