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You are looking for a full-time job, and recently you saw a job opening in an advertisement. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like to do and say what experience and skills you have You should write at least 150 words.

#job #advertisement #company #sort #skills
Dear Sir, I am writing to apply for the secretary in your company. I want to you talk to me about it. I think
l
 am suitable for
this
 job. I would like to work
your
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as your
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sepicial
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special
 secretary. I think
l
 really do it. Because
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 like
this
 job. I worked
a
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as a
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secretary in many countries.
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 in Korea, America Japan and Uzbekistan. I know very well how
work
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to work
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 in
this
 job. When
l
worked
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worked for
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other
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another
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 company, my bosses
delighted
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were delighted
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 with me. My position was always high. And
l
 very patient and reliable. I always do work
order
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. I know technology very well. I forward to your reply.
Your
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Yours
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 faithfully Sevara Rustamova
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a single, clear idea. For instance, separate the introduction from the details of your work experience.
task achievement
Use a formal tone throughout the letter and avoid informal language like 'I worked a secretary'. Consider saying 'I have worked as a secretary in several countries.'
task achievement
You have included all the necessary components: an introduction, details about the job you want, and your relevant skills and experience.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear beginning, middle, and end with appropriate greetings and closings.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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