A close relative of yours is having a birthday lunch next week, but you know you will be working. Write a letter to your boss or supervisor to ask for some time off. In your letter, – explain the situation and why you particularly want to attend the lunch – specify the dates, times and amount of time off you will need – offer to work late or come in early another time to make up for the time

Dear Mr Rogers, I'm writing to inquire about any possibility
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time off from my job to the biggest birthday party lunch I've ever seen before. As you know my uncle is the owner of
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big football club. And his youngest son who is his favourite is welcoming his 15s birthday party
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next week. So
this
cannot be the best birthday without our family. Because my dad is
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uncle to him. But the main reason is not only that. The basic cause is that our whole relatives are gonna be attended to
this
lunch. That's why I need to get to
this
junket. So I need one day off from my job. My uncle
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once
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that it
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be on Wednesday. But yesterday he told us he will be on his tour for
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football match on Wednesday. In
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moved to Friday.
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I didn't forget about work. I can offer you that I will work till
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goes down and I will be here before dusk till dawn. Thank you for understanding. Yours sincerely, Mr Uktamov
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Provide more details about the exact times and amount of time off you need to ensure clarity.
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Use more polite and formal language, particularly when making a request to your boss.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph develops a single idea clearly and concisely to improve overall coherence.
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Double-check sentences for grammatical accuracy and avoid colloquial terms like 'junket' when writing formally.
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The letter clearly explains the reason for the request, showing the significance of the event.
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The greeting and closing are appropriately polite and formal.

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