You joined a sports club recently and are experiencing some problems. Write to the club manager. In your letter Say why you joined the club Explain about the problems you are experiencing Suggest solutions to fix them.

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Dear Sier, With due respect, I am writing

this

to express my disappointment regarding the flat. It has been 6 months that I

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have been

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renting

this

apartment and the interior of the flat is amazing. I love the view of

the

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apply

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city life as it is

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apply

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located in the

suburb

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suburbs

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main

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the main

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city.

Although

everything is perfect except the heating system which is giving the trouble. Sometimes, it does not automatically

changes

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the temperature

according to

the weather so I have to do it manually.

Therefore

, it is disturbing my sleep and causing sleep disorder which is affecting my health. As I know, you just repaired the apartment and again it needs repair. It can be fixed if you will appoint an

electricion

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electrician

from reputed

companies

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company

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who knows well about the issue. I would like you to provide me

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with a

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portable and durable fan that I can utilize for

sometime

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some time

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untill

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until

the heating system

get

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gets

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fixed. I hope you will understand my situation and solve

this

problem as soon

possible

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as possible

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. Yours faithfully, Harmeet Kaur

Submitted by harmeetkohli31 on Mon Aug 12 2024

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task achievement

Ensure the reasons for joining the club are articulated clearly at the beginning of the letter. This will provide context and strengthen the task response.

coherence cohesion

Group similar ideas into paragraphs to enhance clarity and flow. For example, devote one paragraph to why you joined the club and another to the problems encountered.

suitable writing tone

The tone of the letter is polite and formal, which is suitable for addressing a club manager.

logical structure

The logical structure of the letter is generally easy to follow, which aids the reader in understanding the main points.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

175 words

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