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You are living in a University residence, and you have a problem with the high levels of noise from a new campus restaurant which is open until midnight. Write a letter to the governor of the University. In your letter, • complain about the situation • say why this is a problem • and propose ways to reduce the noise

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Dear Sir I am writing to complain about the problem with the high levels of noise from a new
compus
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campus
restaurant
 which is open until midnight I study
the
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university
 which is near
you
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your
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restaurant
. My house
far
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is far
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 from
university
 so that
Iam
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I am
 living in a
university
 residence now. I go to
university
 at 7
o’clock
. My lesson starts at 8
o’clock
 and my lesson ends at 12
o’clock
 and I go to work
13
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o’clock
 and come back home
20
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o’clock
.
I
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I am
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very tired during the day and
i
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 want to sleep enough so that I go to a
university
 residence. When I go to sleep. I hear the high levels of noise from your
restaurant
 that
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us
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 why sometimes I can not sleep enough Your
restaurant
 always opens in the evening because many customers come at
this
 time. They want to relax
the
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restaurant
 and many customers need music to dance and because of
this
 music we
sang
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 not sleep because it is very loud and many students are unhappy about it If you have another place for your
restaurant
, move it there or
listen
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listen to
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 low volume music which is not
the
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apply
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high levels or
open
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 the
restaurant
 in the morning and close in the evening Look forward to hearing from you soon Yours faithfully
obitoo
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obit
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coherence
Ensure consistent use of proper nouns and formal titles (e.g. 'University' instead of 'university', 'Campus' instead of 'compus'). Double-check sentence structures to avoid run-on sentences or comma splices for better readability.
cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea to improve clarity (e.g. separate paragraphs for your schedule and the impact of noise). This will help the reader follow the narrative more easily.
task response
The letter adequately describes the problem, its impact, and offers reasonable suggestions for solutions, covering the task requirements comprehensively.
task response
The writing tone remains formal and appropriate for a letter to a university governor, enhancing the suitability for the given context.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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