The diagram below illustrates the process where bricks are made for the building industry. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below illustrates the process where  bricks are made for the building industry. 

Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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diagram depicts how
bricks
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were made for the building industry. The process has seven main steps, starting with clay in the ground by a digger and finishing with the packaging being delivered to the building industry.
To begin
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with, a digger digs a large amount of clay from the ground.
Second,
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using a metal grid on a roller system,
then
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mixed with sand and water. After that, the mixture is formed into two shapes, which are a wire cutter or a mould.
Furthermore
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, the
bricks
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could spend 1-2 days drying off in an oven before being moved through
a high-temperature kilns
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a high-temperature kiln
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that the
bricks
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will be moderate at 200-980 degrees Celsius, and the second step is even hotter, at 870-1300 degrees Celsius. When the second step is done, the
bricks
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go through a cooling chamber for 2-3 days.
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, it will be packed and delivered to the building industry.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks with synonyms.
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