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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
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The presented bar chart gives information on telephone calls in the United Kingdom in 3 different categories, namely national and international, local and mobile over the period of 7 years from 1995 to 2002. The units are measured in
minutes
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first glance,
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 local telephone calls in fixed lines comprised a higher percentage of all
minutes
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 in comparison with others. Turning to mobiles there is a noticeable improvement from approximately 2% in 1995 to nearly 25% in 2000.
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, over a period of 2 years,
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 point reached its apex with approximately 45%. National and international calls skyrocketed significantly year on year, from just 40 billion
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 to 60 billion in 2002.
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 spent on local calls in fixed lines comprised nearly 75% in 1995, remained stable in 1999 and reached its nadir with nearly 70 billion
minutes
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 in the United Kingdom.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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