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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The provided bar chart gives data on the United Kingdom graduate and postgraduate
students
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 on their destination after leaving college in 2008, namely part-time
work
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, voluntary
work
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,
further
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study
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 and unemployment . The units are measured by number of
students
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. At first glance,
it is clear that
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 a multitude of individuals prefer
further
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study
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 in comparison with other destinations, which exclude full-time
work
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. Among graduates,
further
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study
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 comprised approximately 30,000
students
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. The figures for unemployment and part-time
work
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 were relatively similar, standing at 16,235 and 17,735 respectively. Voluntary
work
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 among graduate
students
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 reached the nadir with 3,500
students
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.
On the other hand
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, the preferences of postgraduate
students
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 were versatile and multifaceted. Only a slight difference existed among individuals who chose
further
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study
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 ( 2,725) and part-time
work
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 ( 2,535).
Nevertheless
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, of studying at college, 1,625
students
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 did not have a desire to
work
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.
However
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, voluntary
work
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 reached the nadir with 345 postgraduate
students
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 who did not go into full-time jobs after leaving college.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work, study with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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