The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. (rewriteja)

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. (rewriteja)
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The diagram provides a breakdown of how carbonated drinks are produced.
Overall
Linking Words
, the production of carbonated drinks involves raw
water
Use synonyms
undergoing five distinct stages at which the
water
Use synonyms
is cleaned, carbonated, mixed with other ingredients, packaged and eventually delivered to the general public. The
process
Use synonyms
commences when raw
water
Use synonyms
from households flows in pipes to a device where it is filtered and softened by the use of chemicals. The clean
water
Use synonyms
is
thereafter
Linking Words
pumped to electric heaters and goes through a cooling pipe to another device where the carbonation
process
Use synonyms
takes place. During
this
Linking Words
process
Use synonyms
, carbon dioxide from another pipe is added to the
water
Use synonyms
. The carbonated
water
Use synonyms
is
then
Linking Words
sent to a cylindrical tank in which it is mixed with colouring, syrup, and flavours and filtered for the second time before being filled into bottles and cans. At
this
Linking Words
stage of the
process
Use synonyms
, the finished beverages are packaged into boxes and eventually dispatched to supermarkets.
Submitted by kamonluck1999 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, process with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: