The diagrams show how the bee makes honey and the stages in the production of honey. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams show how the bee makes honey and the stages in the production of honey. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the process of how a
bee
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makes
honey
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with 6 main steps,
first,
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the queen
bee
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would egg in a
honeycomb
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and the final step is the
bee
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leaving nectar in the
hive
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to produce
honey
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.
Moreover
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, the production of
honey
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begins with removing the
honeycomb
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from the
hive
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, and
finally
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selling it to the customers.
To begin
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with, the queen
bee
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puts the eggs in the
honeycomb
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, and
then
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waits for three days, before it becomes a larva.
Thirdly
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, one week later the larva will be fully grown, and after three more weeks, bees will leave their
hive
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to gather nectar from the flowers.
Lastly
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, bees come back to the
hive
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to leave nectar to make
honey
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.
Additionally
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, in the production of
honey
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,
first,
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the beekeeper removes the
honeycomb
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from the
hive
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and puts the
honeycomb
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in the machine to extract
honey
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. After that, clean the
honey
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by boiling it, when it is finished, remove the
honey
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into a jar and ready for selling.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "first, ".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bee, honey, honeycomb, hive with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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