The diagrams show how the bee makes honey and the stages in the production of honey. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams show how the bee makes honey and the stages in the production of honey. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of how a
bee
makes
honey
with 6 main steps,
first,
the queen
bee
would egg in a
honeycomb
and the final step is the
bee
leaving nectar in the
hive
to produce
honey
.
Moreover
, the production of
honey
begins with removing the
honeycomb
from the
hive
, and
finally
selling it to the customers.
To begin
with, the queen
bee
puts the eggs in the
honeycomb
, and
then
waits for three days, before it becomes a larva.
Thirdly
, one week later the larva will be fully grown, and after three more weeks, bees will leave their
hive
to gather nectar from the flowers.
Lastly
, bees come back to the
hive
to leave nectar to make
honey
.
Additionally
, in the production of
honey
,
first,
the beekeeper removes the
honeycomb
from the
hive
and puts the
honeycomb
in the machine to extract
honey
. After that, clean the
honey
by boiling it, when it is finished, remove the
honey
into a jar and ready for selling.
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