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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
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The pie graphs show how the
amount
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 of
electricity
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 which was produced from different sources in Australia and France changed in two separate years, 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the total generation of
electricity
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 increased in both countries over the period shown, from 100
units
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 to 170
units
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 in Australia and 90
units
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 to 180
units
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 in France. Looking at the Australian pie charts in more detail,
it is clear that
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electricity
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 production from coal increased from 50
units
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 in 1980 to 130
units
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 in 2000, which was the biggest change on the charts.
Similarly
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, the
amount
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 of
electricity
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 which was generated from hydropower slightly increased from 20
units
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 to 36
units
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. The production of
electricity
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 from natural gas and oil both decreased, from 20
units
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 and 10
units
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 respectively in 1980 to 2
units
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in2000
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in 2000
. Turning to the second set of pie charts, showing data from France, it is evident that the
amount
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 of
electricity
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 which was produced from nuclear power increased the most, from 15
units
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 in 1980 to 126
units
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 in 2000.
Electricity
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 generation from coal remained constant at 25
units
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 in both years. The production of
electricity
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 from oil grew slightly from 20
units
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 to 25
units
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. Similar to Australia, the
amount
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 of
electricity
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 which was generated from natural gas decreased from 25
units
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 in 1980 to 2
units
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 in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, electricity, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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