Today tourism is one of the world’s biggest industries, and many poorer countries are depending more and more on tourism for their economy. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of having a large number of tourists visiting a country?

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With
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being one of the largest industries,
counties
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are becoming more reliable
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attracting tourists in order to
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strengthen
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. There are many advantages and disadvantages to being a popular
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among tourists with negative effects being in the lead.
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, the main advantages of
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, are the economic benefits for the government and local
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companies. Many shop owners and tour guides rely on a steady flow of customers
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and are often in
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close proximity to historical landmarks or
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attractions.
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, they are able to catch tourists
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traps" and make a considerably large sum of money every day.
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,
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creates a huge demand for new job openings on popular
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sites, and it can
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motivate the
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to preserve
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historic buildings and monuments.
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, there are many
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disadvantages
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, one of them being overcrowding.
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is mostly an issue when it comes to the popular parts of town or historical landmarks.
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,
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leads to a loud
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environment
that disturbs not only people but
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animals living in the area, actively forcing them out of their natural habitat.
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can create financial stress for locals, mostly when it comes to overpriced food and clothing, especially in huge
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areas.
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leads to increased crime rates and unemployment
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and creates a situation in which the
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fully depends on
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to have a basic functioning economy. In conclusion, there are many disadvantages and advantages to being a
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country
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and depending fully on
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.
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, in my opinion, the negative aspects can in many cases outweigh the positive ones.
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relevant specific examples
Try to use more specific examples to make your points stronger. For instance, mention particular countries or cities that have benefitted economically from tourism, or examples where overcrowding has led to specific problems.
clear comprehensive ideas
Be cautious of spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'strenghten' should be 'strengthen,' 'distvantages' should be 'disadvantages,' and 'enviroment' should be 'environment.'
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introduction conclusion present
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in understanding the overall argument.
logical structure
The main points are logically structured, with advantages discussed first and disadvantages later.
supported main points
The writer discusses relevant points, such as economic benefits, job creation, and issues like overcrowding and financial stress for locals.

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